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15 The pursuit [Task/Uroboros] - Page 2 Empty Re: The pursuit [Task/Uroboros] on Thu Jan 21, 2016 9:39 am

Mea Kurosaki

Pirates
Pirates

Mea Kurosaki
After having her hair ruffled by Linnea and having her go down to the Marine and watching Nicholas having to fight against a captain, Mea grew a little scared but knew she had to keep herself safe and health, away from getting hurt and having to heal anyone that had gotten hurt. Mea would climb down from the mast and ran to side of the ship, behind the stairs next to some guard rails to keep herself on the ship and prevent her from falling down. "what to do... what to do... oh, the grunts need some healing... i need to get them over to my office as quickly as possible. i need to..." Mea thought to herself before motioning the injured grunts and run over to a Marine distracted by the others and smile.

the Marine didn't know Mea was around him so it was the perfect time to use her devil fruit powers. sticking her syringe fingers into him, Mea would produce Estrogen into the guys body, changing his body drastically into a subtle and sexy woman body, causing him to scream and have the other male Marines gawk at the new woman's body, giving the injured grunts time to head to Mea's office and make Mea laugh before herself would head down and heal up the injured grunts by wrapping their wounds with bandages, giving them small shots of healing hormones and additional medicine to give them the best possible chance to recover from all the damage they had taken from the fight.

Skill used:

Tier 1 Skill Name: Estrogen Shot
Tier 1 Skill Type: Devil Fruit
Tier 1 Skill Range: 1m
Tier 1 Skill Cooldown&Duration: 3; 6 posts
Tier 1 Skill Description: Injecting herself or others with this hormone using her hands and fingers like syringes, Mea can give the person injected with this hormone a more feminine figure and appearance, to try and disguise them from her foes. This effect has no combat effect other than potentially distracting affected male targets of T1 and below (Women are immune to the distracting effects but may acquire a more feminine shape)

[OOC, incapacitated one T0 marine]

16 The pursuit [Task/Uroboros] - Page 2 Empty Re: The pursuit [Task/Uroboros] on Fri Jan 22, 2016 5:18 pm

Heyitsq

Pirates
Pirates

Heyitsq
Things seemed to be going their way as the Marines masts was finally destroyed crippling them and stopping their pursuit. Now was the time to strike and to make sure to put an end to this Marines irritating chase. But, this slight victory was only short lived as a voice could be heard from above, and when Ike looked up in response he saw what seemed to look like a big ass bird. “Woooow, that’s a big bird”, the young pirate said in a amazed and interested tone because this would be the first time he seen a bird of that size and physique. “Wait …. That bird talked” he said as he pointed at it with wide eyes looking at his crew for conformation.

That wouldn’t be needed when the bird transformed into a man that bore the features of an rear admiral, so it’s safe to assume that he is Rear Admiral Bates. He landed right next to Nicholas, but he was met with two arrows who was shot by their very own Naga who just claimed to fight Bates. Seeing that his crew has things under wrap on the ship he decided to go over to the Marines ship and wipe out the rest of Bates’ forces. Ike stretched out his arms onto the Melusine’s railings as he walked backwards stretching his arms out with each step he took. “I’ll go fight the men on his ship”, he stated to his Nakamas as he propelled himself through the air onto the Marines ship.

While he was soaring through the air he kicked his leg quickly, but his kick was augmented with his stretching to bring his kick as close to the ship as possible, “rankyaku”. A sharp compressed blade that seemed to be made of air was projected out of his leg and was heading straight for a marine who couldn’t dodge due to the range of the attack. When he landed on the ship he tumbled along the deck to lighten the impact of the jump, and quickly ran towards an unprepared Marine grunt as he stretched his arm back, “Gomu Gomu no Pistoru” his arm stretched towards the man’s face as his fist made contact. Now that everyone one the ship was incapacitated he decided to snoop around and see if he can find anything worth taking.

WC: 391

Stamina: 200/250

Defeated T1 & T0 Marine

Skills Used:
Skill Name: Rankyaku
Skill Type: Hand to Hand
Skill Range: 15m
Skill Cooldown&Duration: 4 Post/1 Post
Skill Description: The Rankyaku is a powerful projectile technique, in which the users start by kicking at very high speeds and strength, sending out a sharp compressed air blade that can slice objects and greatly damage a human body. The default length with a leg or arm is 7m, while the width is up to .5m. This Rankyaku is solely used through the arms and legs with swinging motions.

Tier 1 Skill Name: Gomu Gomu no Pistoru
Tier 1 Skill Type: DF
Tier 1 Skill Range: 0 - 9 meters distance
Tier 1 Skill Cooldown&Duration: 2 posts | Instant
Tier 1 Skill Description: This is Ike's signature attack; he stretches his arm back then throws a devastating punch. In other words, it is a standard straight punch, augmented with stretching. This attack can be used from short to long range.

17 The pursuit [Task/Uroboros] - Page 2 Empty Re: The pursuit [Task/Uroboros] on Sat Jan 23, 2016 5:57 am

Naga D. Linnea

Pirates
Pirates

Naga D. Linnea




WORDS: 750 | TAG: @Uroboros | NOTES:  Total marines Defeated = 4 T1, 10 T0, 1 T3



Before anything else, the Rear admiral pulled out the arrow stuck in his thigh. But then his eyes widened and he wailed in pain as the barbed tip spread out and left a gaping, six pointed start shaped wound, further crippling his ability to walk. He gritted his teeth and glared at a calm, self assured looking Linnea: "These arrows aren't like my last ones... If you pull them out, that will happen. Should I show you what else has changed...?"

The man let out a raptor-like war cry, shooting at at Linnea before dashing in at full speed! She moved her head aside, quickly evading the bullet, but as she dodged he charged again and tried to strike with a downwards slash, which she dodged by quickly stepping aside. Her eyes completely focused on her opponent, but her body wasn't fast enough to keep up with the bird zoan in hybrid form: The guy followed up his attack with a gutting foot talon slash, against which Linnea could do nothing - still being mid dodge - save for coat her belly with Haki. It kept the strike from going through, but the impact still hurt and it didn't stop her from getting flung a good few meters back and crashing through a wall of her own ship. The archer spat blood as multiple splinters lodged into her back and her shoulder wound re-opened.

"Tch... He's fast...", she grunted to herself, knowing she was at a disadvantage up close and personal

She was losing strength in her left arm, though thankfull she was still at a point that she could raise and hold her bow... But her enemy would give her no time to relax. Just as it became clear she was still conscious, Bates flew at her again and Lin gasped, gritting her teeth, and barely coating her bow with Haki. She managed to raise it enough to block his sword attack, and finally seeing an opening as he tried to break through her guard: Drawing an arrow, she quickly fired her Overdrawn Viper's Bite attack and knocked him right back out onto the deck, where she immediately primed another arrow. Staggered and wounded with an arrow stuck through his chest, Rear Admiral Bates was at a disadvantage. If he tried to charge, he'd end up filled with arrows. Not willing to take that chance, he flew back up, soaring around the ship and raining lead on Linnea as he put away his sword. The supressing fire kept her from doing anythiung but dodging and he deftly avoided the Melusine's cannoballs, before finally plummeted towards her at full speed, having swapped his gun for his sword primed on the Archer. Despite the danger, Linnea finally saw an opening since her foe wasn't shooting at her anymore:

"I'll show you the power of my new weapon, Concetta...!", With determined eyes, she was ready to show him why she had named this weapon after her closest childhood friend. With that, Linnea loaded two arrows and let loose not only one, but a doubled up finishing skill, both coated with jet black Busoshoku Haki, "Drill shot!!"

The two arrows spun through the air leaving a spiralling trail, tracing a menacing path straight towards Bates... One arrows was firmly primed onto his skull and he reflexively turned his head aside, trying to yaw out of the way: But it was too late. In the time it took him to see how the arrows were shot he was already too close for it to make any difference, and the two arrows pierced through his left wing and right shoulder, and before long the birdman plummeted with finally frustrated cry of pain, "FUUUUUUU-", he was interrupted by suddenly crashing onto the ship's side with a loud *bonk*, "---UUUCK-!!", *splash*, "*glub glub glub*..."

As he fell into the water, his fate was sealed. None of the pirates would even risk hauling him back to the surface and none of his men were in shape to go help him. Linnea looked down into the water, half respect for the fallen enemy commander, half to make sure the relentless Marine didn't suddenly come back up somehow... But he didn't, and Linnea's part of the battle was over. Sweating and breathing heavily for the strain of using so many Haki and Skills at once, she was nonetheless happy to see her crewmates didn't require her help, instead leaning on the main mast and checking on her bruises and bleeding wounds.



Spoiler:

Haki used: active A-rank Kenbu, D-rank Buso; C-rank Buso (10/70 H. Stamina)

Total stamina used: 145/500


Tier 3 Skill Name: Overdraw
Tier 3 Skill Type: Marksman
Tier 3 Skill Range: Half the weapon's range
Tier 3 Skill Cooldown&Duration: 5 turns CD; Lasts 3 turns
Tier 3 Skill Description: A simple technique exploiting the ability to apply extra tension to an arrow, allowing it to strike with much greater impact. Arrows fired while this technique is active will knockback opponents hit by it 10m; unless the opponent is further than half the weapon's range away from Linnea.

Tier 2 Skill Name: Viper Bite
Tier 2 Skill Type: Marksman
Tier 2 Skill Range: 1/4 the weapon's range
Tier 2 Skill Cooldown&Duration: 3 turns; Instant
Tier 2 Skill Description: Designed to take out enemies at point blank range, the user draws, aims and fires at one rank speed much faster than normal, allowing the whole movement to be executed much faster but preventing the arrows from flying too far. The user accelerates instantly and shoots above what would normally be possible (T3.5 speed) and momentarily staggers an opponent hit by it. In compensation, range is limited to 1/4 of the weapon's own range. Deals T2 Damage.


Tier 4 Skill Name: Drill Shot (+ Concetta's Active ability)
Tier 4 Skill Type: Marksman
Tier 4 Skill Range: Same as the weapon's range
Tier 4 Skill Cooldown&Duration: 6 posts CD; instant
Tier 4 Skill Description: By flicking her arrow downwards with her thumb as she lets it loose, she causes that arrow to spin much faster than normal, increasing its piercing power akin to a drill. As a result, this arrow will pierce through any and all substances of T4 and below, as well as deal extra T4 damage to enemies hit by it.




Range, 10 Metres



"A sleepless Snake... is the most aggressive *yawns*"
- Naga D. Linnea

credit to nat of adoxography.


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18 The pursuit [Task/Uroboros] - Page 2 Empty Re: The pursuit [Task/Uroboros] on Sat Jan 23, 2016 7:44 am

Mea Kurosaki

Pirates
Pirates

Mea Kurosaki
Taking care of the wounds of the grunts, each having different spots to patch up and wrap up in herb filled bandages and assorted pills filled with medical herbs and a few additional herbs to increase their recover time by a very large amount. Mea was too focused on healing all the wounds of all the grunts that had gotten hurt in the fighting above, she would have finished up with all of them before checking up on Linnea and co on the deck upstairs, right when Linnea was leaning on the mast to recover.

spotting Linnea, Mea would go over to her and give hug alongside a few bits of medical pills just in case she needed a way to recover anymore of her pain. "Linnea, i am happy your OK. i see you got everyone of the baddies taken down and the newly made woman Marine is still out cold. i feel bad for her, so i might as well do the right thing... and put her on a dingy to let her go home. i don't want to kill the poor thing as that is not what a doctor does. i hope you understand." Mea said before going to the woman Marine, pick her up, place her on to a dingy before lowing it down onto the sea.

Mea would then release the dingy before going back to Linnea, yawn slightly before lying next to Linnea and starting to rest right on her shoulder, keeping a smile on her face as of what she had accomplished today, and how she wanted to keep growing her confidence until she was able to fight others without the use of anyone else but a few people to help her keep the others safe and away from harm.

19 The pursuit [Task/Uroboros] - Page 2 Empty Re: The pursuit [Task/Uroboros] on Sun Jan 24, 2016 11:02 pm

Heyitsq

Pirates
Pirates

Heyitsq
Quick steps could be heard on the Marines ship as Ike had found where they left all their gold and that he’d take it upon his self to take it. They did chase them for quite some time, so he thought of it as payment for bothering them for such a long period of time. Looking from room to room he first found their kitchen and found some food that wasn’t even eaten yet so decided to chow down first. “Yum!”, he said as he was stuffing his face with the meat that was prepared but not eaten; he also was lucky enough to find some water to drink with his meat. It only took minutes for Ike to devour their whole supply of meat and water. Wiping the leftovers from his lips with his forearm he started to continue his search through the Marines battle ship.

Going through various rooms he found large sums of gold that he collected together in a big bag to carry any valuables and money. A few lucky items he came across were a baby den den mushi and a regular den den mushi which normally would cost a nice amount of money. “They won’t be needing these”, he said as he put the regular den den mushi in the sack with the rest of the gold that he found. He think look down in the palm of his right hand as he clinched onto the baby den den mushi which planned to keep for himself as a way to communicate with the team. Running back onto the main deck it was clear and safe for him to travel, “Geppo” he began to jump into the air and kick off the air and was now traveling through the air just by kicking off it thanks to his power legs. Ike elegantly landed back on the ship in the middle of his crew as he simply grinned opening his sack showing his loot and revealing what he found in his right hand.

WC: 337
Stamina: 185/250

Skills Used:
Skill Name: Geppo
Skill Type: Speed
Skill Range: Self
Skill Cooldown&Duration: 3 Post/Upkeep
Skill Description: The Geppo allows the users to actually jump off the air itself, allowing them to stay in the air for much longer than usual. While the technique itself affords several advantages both in and out of battle for the user, it has but one major weakness: since its usage depends heavily on the user's legs, restraining, damaging, or pinning down any major parts of their lower body can significantly disrupt Geppo. The amount of distance it can cover is reliant on your speed stat.

OOC; Not sure if I am allowed to loot an Marine Ship for their Den Den Mushi since typically the have them on board. If not I  can remove that from my post.

20 The pursuit [Task/Uroboros] - Page 2 Empty Re: The pursuit [Task/Uroboros] on Mon Jan 25, 2016 5:13 am

Flashdance

Pirates
Pirates

Flashdance
Wood crashed and splintered as the chains of Captain Moriarity slammed into the deck, trying to strike at the Uroboros Pirate's navigator. However, the man was proving more agile than the marine captain had anticipated. Unfortunately for Nicholas, the constantly flailing chains made it difficult for him to get in close. Maybe he should invest in some ranged weaponry in the future, prevent this sort of situation.

Moriarity was more than aware of the situation regarding his me. They were getting utterly creamed, and his inability to land a hit on Nicholas was frustrating him to no end. "Dammit," he yelled out angrily, lashing out and only managing to take a chunk out of the ruined mast, "Get over here and face your punishment like a man!" Nicholas laughed, dodging the attack and leaping up towards the rigging, scurrying up it as top speed. "Why don't you come up here and get me?" he laughed, mocking the angry marine captain further. With a hiss of rage, Moriarity launched both his chains at him. Nicholas dodged, only for the chains to get caught and tangled in the rigging. The marine had fallen into Nicholas's trap. He lept straight towards the captain, the captain in turn trying to pull away, but the chains wrapped around his arms kept him in place.

"Burning Impact!"

Let it be known that getting hit with an impact dial hurts...a lot. Now imagine taking one, along with a burst of flame from a flame dial, straight to the face! There was a loud 'boom' as the attack connected, fire and spoke surrounded the impact sight. Nicholas flew back from the recoil, managing to land on his feet. His right arm was aching from the blast, but no doubt the captain suffered worse. As the smoke cleared, he saw he was right. The captain was slumped forward, unconscious, his arms still held up by his chains.

Nicholas gave a smile and dusted himself off. "And that is how you do it!"

skills used:

Tier 1 Skill Name: Impact Burn
Tier 1 Skill Type: Hand to Hand
Tier 1 Skill Range: Melee
Tier 1 Skill Cooldown&Duration: 2/instant
Tier 1 Skill Description: Nicholas delivers an open palm, two handed strike, triggering the Flame and Impact Dials at the same time. This not only delivers a powerful blast from the Impact Dial, but also the burning heat of the Flame Dial. Requires Flame Dial (one hand) and Impact Dial (other hand).

Impact Dial and Flame Dial used.
Jet Dial on cooldown.

T2 Captain defeated.

21 The pursuit [Task/Uroboros] - Page 2 Empty Re: The pursuit [Task/Uroboros] on Mon Jan 25, 2016 7:33 am

Naga D. Linnea

Pirates
Pirates

Naga D. Linnea




WORDS: 300~ | TAG: @Uroboros | NOTES: Total marines Defeated = ALL!




"Finally...", Linnea sighed, relieved beyond all measure, even smiling at the destruction brought onto their ship... Sleepless nights will do that to you... She pet Mea as she came up to hug her, gladly accepting her medication and promptly swallowing the pills. She didn't look the least bit worried about Mea using one of their rowboats to the newly genderbent Marine girl, the young Kuja was nice like that...

Thus, Linnea looked on towards her allies. Ike had wiped out everyone on deck with relative ease owing to his Devil Fruit powers, but then his work had only begun since they still had to loot the enemy ship, and there was also their damaged ship to worry about - since he was the only shipwright - while Nicky had taken it upon himself to bring down the enemy first mate. While not nearly as powerful as Bates due to the absence of a Devil Fruit, but then Linnea was thoroughly surprised when she heard a loud explosion accompanied by a blazing firestorm. Her eyes widened as she admired her Navigator's smarts, combining the impact with a flaming discharge was more than enough for even Marine Captain...

"Wow, everyone...", Praised Linnea, impressed at how well each of them was able to perform despite the lack of much needed sleep. She was glad they had all decided to join her, and was certain they would soon be ready to brave the Grand Line, "That was impressive...!"

And with this, she smiled and walked up to Ike, to take a look at what he had looted. The Marines had all sorts of fancy technology they could either pawn or ask Liara to reverse engineer. She wasn't sure it was worth so many sleepless nights, but it was certainly a fair reward for beheading this Marine regiment. With a yawn, Linnea retreated into the ship, resting in the doctor's office until Mea came back, she had too many splinters embedded in her back to try and remove on her own...

[Thread exit]


Range, 10 Metres



"A sleepless Snake... is the most aggressive *yawns*"
- Naga D. Linnea

credit to nat of adoxography.


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22 The pursuit [Task/Uroboros] - Page 2 Empty Re: The pursuit [Task/Uroboros] on Tue Jan 26, 2016 6:19 am

Flashdance

Pirates
Pirates

Flashdance
Well, that was that. The marines had been beaten, their ship crippled, and they would FINALLY get some peace and quiet...at least enough to get some sleep before they went on their next wild and crazy adventure. Though this little misadventure had taught Nicholas something. He REALLY needed to get to work on establishing his little information network. That way, they could get information on any pursuing marines right from the get go, and thus avoid all this. If anything, it would make getting chased much more tolerable.

He swaggered back onto the deck of his ship, watching as any loot and valuables were taken from the marine ship. Any marines that survived this would find themselves flat broke, and having to explain their complete and utter humiliation. A fitting punishment for putting them all through this. His arm still ached from the use of the impact dial, but it would clear up in time. No sense in worrying the little doctor about it. She was concerned enough with their wounded captain, and a bullet wound was much more severe than a simple sore arm.

"I'd say that's a wrap people!" Nicholas announced with a smile, "Once we're done robbing these bastards, let us head to Ohara for relaxation and cocktails! But first..." And then, without another word, Nicholas collapsed to the floor with a 'thump!'. At first it would seem like he collapsed but some sort of injury, but upon closer inspection, you would notice that the man was snoring. Having many sleepless nights would make even the wooden deck of a ship look comfy.

[Exit]

23 The pursuit [Task/Uroboros] - Page 2 Empty Re: The pursuit [Task/Uroboros] on Tue Jan 26, 2016 5:35 pm

Heyitsq

Pirates
Pirates

Heyitsq
Ike watched as Nichloas still had one more Marine to take care of, but he took care of him in a matter of minutes. Not to mention he did in such a stylish and suave way that it should defiantly earn him some brownie points within the group. “Niccee”, the young pirate said in amazement as he clapped a little as he was pretty impressed with the show their Navigator put on for them. He was right not to interfere because if he did more than likely Ike would probably fall overboard due to the impact dial. And, that was the end for Rear Admiral Bates and Captain Moriarity as they now had to embrace their new watery grave. Looking at his own ship he noticed that they as well took some damage but not as worse as the Marines with a broken mast and many damages due to artillery.

Even their captain was in pretty bad shape after fighting the Marines as she stayed perched up against their Mast until Mea finally arrived and started tending to her wounds. After getting some medical attention she was a bit curious to what Ike had hauled from the Marines battle ship. So, when she came over he opened the bag a little bigger to show what he was able to loot from them. He yawned in the process because he also was feeling a little tired after working up an appetite and eating all the Marines food supply. Leaving the bag for Naga to handle Ike looked down at his baby den den mushi as he picked up Nicholas and walked to the sleeping quarters to get some shut eye.

WC: 279

Stamina: 185/250

[Exit]

24 The pursuit [Task/Uroboros] - Page 2 Empty Re: The pursuit [Task/Uroboros] on Wed Jan 27, 2016 6:57 am

Mea Kurosaki

Pirates
Pirates

Mea Kurosaki
the commotion that had happened since a few days back had finally ended and Mea was all tuckered out from it but she needed to stay awake and tend to everyone wounds including a few bits of injuries she got from under the deck when they got blasted with splinters flying off the Marine ship. Waking up from a little short nap, Mea would go back down to her office and see that Linnea was there with a punch of splinters in her back, blood coming out of the punctured holes that had formed, which made Mea a little bit scared of how much pain Linnea was in but knew she could handle it and that she herself would need to be careful getting each of them out.

"Don't squirm or move around once i pull each splinter out. you will need to be still so then i don't want to accidentally give you a scar or two after getting them out... it would be hard to patch them up.. " Mea said in a worried tone before plucking each splinter out carefully and gently, to cause as minimal pain as she could possibly cause to Linnea. Once pulling out all the splinters, Mea would bandage Linnea up with the last remaining bandages she had in her bag before sending Linnea off to her own room, then setting up her Hammock, pillow and blanket before reading another book about medicine and questions from a medical school, learning what each and every type of virus there was out in the west blue and how to counter act them before heading to bed, recovering from all the trauma and damage she and the others had taken for the past few days.

[Exit]

25 The pursuit [Task/Uroboros] - Page 2 Empty Re: The pursuit [Task/Uroboros] on Thu Jan 28, 2016 1:31 pm

Raza

Revolutionary Captain
Revolutionary Captain

Raza
Review:


Good job, guys! I'd write more but I'm working currently.

Positives: I loved how you all worked together, how everyone had a roll and helped out to the best of their ability and to the extent that their roles would allow. Great job, Mea! I enjoyed your posts and your non-combat characters contributions, even that one t0 grunt you managed to defeat lol! Flash, you kept in character and I didn't have any difficulty understanding your posts. Hey, great job! Your character was dynamic and pushed the thread along.


Cons: The thread clearly had driver (though that was expected since Naga is the captain) and everyone else played second fiddle. While this may be okay on the anime or manga, you all have individual characters and should make more of a endeavor to develop them, and not just fight and kill. Flash, you essentially defeated a t2 captian in barely two posts using only two t1 skils. I'm not at all happy with that. Like... at all. This lazy style of fighting doesn't cut it and it wont be rewarded in the future.

All in all, Bare minimum posts are not okay, especially when you have Naga writing very detailed and expressive posts. You should strive to conform to the leader of your crews methods, even in terms of OOC Rping. Otherwise, you're doing a disservice to her. Sorry if I sound harsh but I'm simply trying to get you guys to try a little more. Its plainly obvious when you're writing just to get to 250.

Bounty: $400,000 each
Beli: $300K + 20% Bonus = $360,000 for Mea, Hey, Flash; $$300K +25% Bonus= $375,000 for Naga
Exp: 3 each (Flash I reset you but you'll have to make a request for your T2 spec points)

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